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    dots Submission Name: speaking inside myselfdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsspeaking inside myselfdots
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    when does the river speak?
    feathers run
    through the orange forest
    with a nap
    as i nap.

    i've brushed
    at the moon puddles
    in the darkness.
    my reflection deepens
    as i deepen.

    the wind returns to me
    all the whispers
    that never make it past my tongue.
    i'm speaking inside myself
    from inside myself.

    my heart breaks
    with the cracking of the trees,
    & with the pale moss in the palm
    of my eye.
    my hunger is cold
    when i am cold.

    pictures gather no meaning
    in the heat of the fire.
    they only dance there
    void and heartstuck
    in the lonely mirror
    where i am lonely in the mirror.

    strip away the fuchsine,
    i'm coming in...




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