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A Moment in the Divine


Author: 7makaveli
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A Moment in the Divine



What comes to mind when one thinks of the divine?
Is it a spiritual experience? Or do the stars just align?
Let us freeze this moment in time, and look for a cold sign,
A cerebral shift in focus makes the view so fine,
At first I see four corners each with its own set line,
I dare not trespass into the side with the fiery mines,
This other side looks benign, it is here I ride the pine,
I let time escape and lo the moment is no longer mine,
I should have known you cannot bottle time like wine,
It flows slowly but surely every time it is inclined,
I hope my requests to relive this are not denied,
Feelings of sensation escape me like the soul from the dead,
No regrets, I simply gather my thoughts in my head,
I do not wish to return to the land of dread,
Predictably searching for my next loaf of bread,
So onwards I tread, this could last an eternity,
For I am simply looking for a moment of infinity,
For me to live in this state of divinity, for me to truly make this a trilogy,
I hope detachment can grant me liberty, and bless me with chivalry, unbound from civility,
Alas, this moment has fortified me heavily,
It is now time to return to the warmth of reality,
What's this? Could I really be trapped in my own bigotry?
Release me I no longer conform to this machinery!
As the four corners divulge to trap my mind, I wonder,
Who knew a moment in the divine could last a lifetime?





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  hey this was very insightful!! definately invites introspection! it was easy to read and follow along with and the subject matter was clear. the rhyme was good and didn't sound forced, good write!!!
| Posted on 2008-02-12 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]


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