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    dots Submission Name: Gobble de Gookdots
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    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1556/457/118
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       Too many kooks in the kitchen? Actually this might just be about possible repressed anxieties ("gook) and the fact that we are forced to "eat" them regularly in the course of our daily lives.


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    dotsGobble de Gookdots
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    Break fast, better fore sight
    in keeping the bottom wherefore you stall
    mom's making wishes forever to call
    a sweet sound so lonely
    if ever to choose
    that chance for to lose

    but nothing, nay nothing
    will distract the man
    that grasps for righteous
    instead of a pan
    doesn't fit with the plan
    cannot we understand

    astray on a tangent
    a mountain to climb
    talus mundane project profane
    a skillet of onion avast in the flame

    which watch better than fetter
    a sizzle or fry
    to catch the eye
    waist not juant not
    tis bourbon or dye




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      well that is what it is...gobbledegook...

    a moment of distraction...in the middle of cooking breakfast, maybe an omelet...

    the train of thought lost...the pan catches fire...

    back to reality, put out the flame...maybe put the mind out to pasture..

    it's getting dangerous.
    | Posted on 2011-04-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I can appreciate the attempt at humour in this (I do, believe me), but I also think it could be refined to further ends if you really wanted the challenge. My first year english teacher wouldn't stop using this word (he didn't that much; like me, he was a man of a great many bizarre words, this one just stuck) when he'd talk about his time with the government. The gobbledegook! he'd say in his way with Indian undertones.

    There could definitely be words of value behind the cumbersome goop.

    Marc.
    | Posted on 2010-02-26 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds to me it's a bottoms up call if you disobey mom's teach. Yes, it's a "skillet of onion avast in the flame" (watch out tears). And the last stanza rejoins the piece by saying better watch your P's & Q's. Liked this jolly piece .
    | Posted on 2008-09-14 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to tell you I worked with Alzheimer's patients today so reading this is

    No they didn't say much, but neither did I
    I like your rhyme though it's like hearing
    a train of thought go by
    and realizing
    none of
    it makes
    sense
    even though the rhythm
    seems very clear.

    I feel calm, blank and peaceful
    maybe that was your intention?

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there! Well, you surely Gobbled de Gook this one exigently. Reminds me of the hemidemisemiquaver note that rhymes with sublime. Very well done!! I like it. Regards Joachim
    | Posted on 2008-02-12 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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