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    dots Submission Name: A Change In Lovedots
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    Author: E. Audine
    ASL Info:    28/M/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 21/17/12
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    dotsA Change In Lovedots
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    A Change in Love

    A change in love,
    A time for change;
    Change in mind, body, and soul.
    A change for you, a change for me
    To change for all that we can be,
    ma vie...

    Everything is different now,
    This isn't what we have before.
    Everything seems to have gone wrong now
    what happened to you and me
    ma vie...

    Love seems to want to run from us,
    It's struggling to break free and break it's bonds.
    It runs from you, It runs from me
    Runs to all the things it wants to be
    ma vie...

    Love should never run away ma vie
    Not from us, not from anybody
    Not if we can understand it
    And accept it as it wanted to be
    ma vie...

    Love wanted acceptance
    Acceptance to who we are
    and to who we are to each other
    'Coz it believes that we can be
    who it wants us to be
    ma vie...

    Love is changing
    Changing from you
    Changing from me
    Changing us to all it want us to be

    Love can accomplished what others cannot..
    It can face the future, it can face the past..
    We can be who it want us to be ma vie..




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      This one is lovely almost like a song. It blends smoothly. I'm glad to see another Filipino here and writing as awesome as this.

    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-10-04 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. Especially the repeating line ma vie. Is this a song? Cause it kinda sounds like one...

    Anyway, keep on writing!
    | Posted on 2011-07-30 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      This is just so sad.Times change, people change and when you can do nothing about it, you can cry, you ask what the hell went wrong when you were so sure it would be right.That it would unfold precisely the way you saw it or the way Love itself tells many it will go.

    Love seems to want to run from us,

    That is almost wrong.That Love would run to ruin from the people who chase it and want it so badly.
    Or does it want to run away from the human hands after being choked in held for so long, love can suffocate people.

    Love should never run away ma vie

    It shouldn't.It should be like an internal landmark, with cement prints of what the person authorized for that love to have symbolic.It stands for everything of the personal world, keeping war from taking place, to see it run is devastating.

    Ma vie repetition doesn't seem random but if that was apart of your thinking of this being set out and laced up on a touchy--ventricle shifting subject then that is fine by the creative side.

    It's still sad though, it's just holding truths up with it.
    | Posted on 2011-04-21 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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