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    Author: Dutchess_aira
    ASL Info:    23/f/HI
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 41/42/22
    Words: 418
    Class/Type: Misc/Broken
    Total Views: 591
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       I thought I was easy to understand until an ex-boyfriend kept pointing it out that I was complicated...who knew a person could say the same shit over and over again in a single conversation..Complicated..I hate that word


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    The floor is my love
    I lay sprawled thinking
    Of how things got so complicated
    Robin Thickes songs plays
    Though I wish it were another
    A sad song that says what Im feeling

    I never meant for things to go as they have
    Thought I knew from the beginning
    Played a left and made a left into you
    What happened to play left go right?
    You never were the one to do it on your own

    Chantilly lace cutesy girl bullshit
    Essence of a Girly hooker
    How I feel at times
    Spread legs gets the world fed
    The lace is just extra packaging
    Yet Im still complicated

    I try to feel
    I am cold to all
    All except whove shown me love through the harshest times
    I know that was love
    Yet Im still complicated

    Blame me for hiding my emotions
    I know not how to let go anymore
    I have to much to worry about
    My life
    Yet Im still complicated
    To be so far and yet not close enough to my dream
    I wait
    Yet Im still complicated

    Twenty Years young and taking the world
    I have no kids to bother me
    No hounding exs
    Yet Im still complicated
    My heart isnt the easiest to get a hold of
    It comes and goes like the weather
    One minute you are loved
    The next hated

    Yet you know my demons
    I once thought of little girl dreams
    Until a grown man woke me up
    With his fist in my eye
    Yet
    I repeat myself to give you awareness
    To open myself up to heal
    Yet

    Yet I still am misunderstood
    I swallow 15 pills hoping to drown
    In bodily fluid
    Colors pass by
    Eyes flutter
    I pass out
    Thinking hoping is it the end
    Yet

    I lay at night holding my sheets
    Pain all over
    Minor heart attacks encase themselves within mine heart
    Haunt me when Im 35

    Yet
    I fell in love
    With him though he only wanted to play with my heart
    Yet
    I swore to myself no other man would be
    Him
    Though I live with the consequences of my heart
    Yet

    This is the end
    Only 28 pills left to go I know for sure this will be the end
    Of all my complicated ways, misunderstandings, confusions
    They end with death
    Oct. 13, 2007 12:00am Deceased








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      It seems to be more of a venting poem. Not much flow...
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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