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    dots Submission Name: Awful Needdots
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    Author: Jerilynn
    ASL Info:    59, woman, U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 68/66/20
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 797
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       Have you ever felt this way? It's no picnic.


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    dotsAwful Needdots
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    This awful need
    Crawls through
    Every fiber of my being
    Clutching me
    By the throat,
    Causing me to gasp
    With itís all consuming power.
    Itís shadow,
    Hovers over me
    Blocking out the light,
    Until all I see
    Is the darkness.
    Will I ever find the weapon
    To destroy this intruder?
    Does one exist?
    Will I wake one day and find
    That itís only power
    Was in my fear?
    Will I overcome and escape
    Or will I continue to live
    forever,
    With this awful need?




    Submitted on 2008-02-12 23:58:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Everyone has this type of conflict but very few can describe it as smoothly as you've just done, and because of that this poem caught me. love it
    | Posted on 2008-02-19 00:00:00 | by Mirado | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent write Jerilynn! Your verse describes those things that are worse in our fantasy or imagination than they ever could be in real world. There's always "something out there" for all of us! Lets all hope it never jumps out of the bushes for real and grabs us!!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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