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    dots Submission Name: Just This Oncedots
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    Author: Anticlownperson
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere land
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 248/390/118
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 969
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    Description:
       Every year, I write a poem for Valentine's Day about how stupid I find the holiday. I thought this year I'd give poor valentine's a break and let her go about her business in full cheer and limit my exploits to significant glances and laughing incessantly :D


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    dotsJust This Oncedots
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    It's that time of year again
    When I write something
    Snarky
    Sarcastic
    Satirical
    About Valentine's Day
    Something about
    Love and roses and
    How neither lasts forever
    And both have thorns

    If love be rough with you
    Be rough with love
    Prick love for pricking
    And you beat love down


    This year, though
    I'll write no poems
    About futility of love
    And consumerist holidays
    Let Valentine's Day
    Get on with itself
    And spare the world
    My depravity and
    My debauchery
    For just one year

    Forgive her, Father
    For she knows not
    What she says




    Submitted on 2008-02-13 01:42:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I love the idea behind it, smiting Valentines Day for being a piece of crap worthless holiday, meant only to sell crap cards and chocolate, and make those w/o someone feel...alone. Great write, s'all I can say.

    Duv
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. I loved the last four lines of the first stanza. I to write a poem about Valentine's Day every year. Despite if I'm in a relationship or not. Never thought not to though. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    MIss MIsery
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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