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    dots Submission Name: Cruel Little Gamedots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 858
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 674



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       Ahh this one isn't so good.. ohwell I guess I should go back to my older style >_< Read if you dare.. Enjoy


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    dotsCruel Little Gamedots
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    What do
    you
    want me
    to do?

    I swear
    to you
    I'll do it.

    Tell me
    what you
    want to
    hear.

    I promise
    you
    I'll say it.

    Please don't
    push
    me
    away.

    I'll do
    almost
    anything.

    When you say
    you love me
    do you
    mean it?

    Or is it just
    some cruel
    little game?

    I don't know
    what to do anymore
    But I know I want you.
    Please help me




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    ||| Comments |||
      Simple and strong. The message is clear and i can identify with the feeling alot. bravo
    | Posted on 2008-12-17 00:00:00 | by TheBlackFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... simple. quiet simple. i think iut should have the name, cruel little game, but hey... that's me.... this reminds me of me, except freewritten... which is cool i bump with it, hey u wanna collab? I got sum ideas....
    | Posted on 2008-09-26 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem a lot. For me it's very easy to relate too. Simple but very much gets the point across. Well put.
    | Posted on 2008-02-14 00:00:00 | by Tidal33 | [ Reply to This ]


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