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    dots Submission Name: Swallowsdots
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    Author: Jerilynn
    ASL Info:    59, woman, U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 68/66/20
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 763
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    Bytes: 425



    Description:
       I can hardly wait till springtime once again.


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    dotsSwallowsdots
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    They come
    with the daffodils
    in the spring.
    Swooping gaily
    through the air
    calling jubilantly
    to one another

    Their songs awaken
    Mother earth.
    she stretches
    and yawns,
    arraying herself
    in rainbow colors,
    her garments
    shimmering gloriously.
    With each heaving breath
    she expels
    more grandeur.




    Submitted on 2008-02-13 14:08:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh i like this!! i know how you're feeling... i don't know where you're from but i'm up in washington, very close to the canadian border and it's all gloomy and rainy quite often... the few wintery days of sunlight are AMAZINGLY welcome and i cannot WAIT until spring so i can walk around without shoes.
    | Posted on 2008-02-14 00:00:00 | by andnow | [ Reply to This ]
      Man, this makes me wish it was Spring! The only criticism I have is it's a little close to cliché with the daffodils and rainbow. Almost like a laundry detergent commercial. ALMOST. The last 5 lines I love.
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by Lunablue | [ Reply to This ]
      This is delightful, and has the mood of the return of the Swallows! I like the poetic idea of their awakening Mother Earth, encouraging her to put forth spring colors and flowers!! This verse reads like a breath of spring, and provides a refreshing relief in the dead of winter!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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