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The People We Should Quote


Author: Suven7
ASL Info:    20 female Fla
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Class/Type: Prose /Serious
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...I really really do like quotes. Send me some good ones I could add to my collection.


The People We Should Quote



My heart is obsessed with seeking out quotes
To ponder during my empty hours.
I have ones from Duke Ellington and Aphra Behn,
But none from Oprah; her show is entertaining
But not exactly inspiring. I saw Bono in her
Show once and he was inspiring. But the host,
Not so much.

I have ones from my history teacher and my
English composition teacher, and the greatest
Teacher of all: Bangsund. But blundering quotes
From “stars” never make it into my blog.
I know I won’t go to prison for libel or
Slander; their reputations are that mucky
Already. To incorporate their thoughts
Into my vocabulary would be just
Quite distasteful.

I have ones from Dave and a book called
Cry, The Beloved Country; I have ones from
Kate Chopin’s The Awakening and Orson
Scott Card’s Ender’s Shadow. But none
From movies and T.V. shows – those I say
Out loud and laugh over and make fun of,
But they are not the stuff that can fill
My empty hours.

My heart is filled with worldly quotes and
I am never satisfied. The voices of
Dead authors and living teachers ring
In my ears all day and they get me through
But they never get me by.

I ought to brush the dust off my Bible, and
Leaf through its golden pages. My heart’s
Obsession for quotes might just be a
Manifestation of a hunger for the Word.




Submitted on 2008-02-13 18:48:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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   I liked how you seperated the desires of your heart and of your mind. The heat does obsess about the Word and it's important everyone realizes that. You make a valid point here.

As for critical analysis, this poem seems to lack an overall rhyming scheme. It's structure is unique but it could be refined. I like your vague/deep pieces of merit because they can potentially contain an infinite amount of meaning which applies to each person individually, allowing them to relate to the poem on a much more personal and inspiring level. This poem is interesting and insightful, but it specific and therefore I can't apply your inspiring thoughts on life to my own - I'm left to aplly simply what has been explicitly given...like the constitution and the judiciary.

UGH! There :P

In reality I think you're an awesome writer and I don't like being critical or pieces that deserve praise. You shouldn't make me be so antipatico.

I love you!
Andy - Olah

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| Posted on 2008-02-14 00:00:00 | by Olah89 | [ Reply to This ]
  "Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth."
-Oscar Wilde

Okay, so maybe it's not very inspiring but I like it anyways. I want a mask. :-0 Oh, the things I would say!
| Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]


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