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    dots Submission Name: I Can't Helpdots
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    Author: LongPastDead
    Elite Ratio:    6.55 - 34/67/30
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 93
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       For: Alexis Roper; Paul Stover; Warren Stover

    I love you, Cousin; Uncle; Great Grandfather.
    You were my best friends.


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    dotsI Can't Helpdots
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    I can't help;
    Holding on to the memories,
    If only to see the smiles again.
    To cherish all the beautiful things,
    To remember the miracle of them.

    I can't help thinking;
    Of the joyful friend,
    Who offered comfort to anyone who asked.
    The sound of his deep laughter,
    Making the deepest of sorrows pass.

    I can't help remembering;
    The somber old man,
    Who would smile behind a newspaper.
    The feel of his worn-heavy hand,
    Holding our dramatic world together.

    I can't help cherishing;
    The precious little girl,
    Who was here for such a short time.
    The tenderness of her smile,
    Turning even the cruelest hearts kind.

    I can't help;
    The way I can't breath when I think,
    Of the times we could have had.
    The way I cry when I wish,
    (If only for a moment) I could have you back.

    I can't help;
    Wanting to know if you think of me too,
    In that paradise you now call home.
    Knowing that without you,
    I feel desperately alone.

    I can help;
    Ease the pain by remembering,
    The great times we shared back then.
    Keep you alive by dreaming,
    Of the love I'll have until the day we're together again.




    Submitted on 2008-02-14 04:30:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      How do you survive the loss of such close people?
    I feel for you.
    | Posted on 2008-07-11 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...That is amazing. I love it. I feel sad, overwhelmed, and happy all at the same time. You put into words what I could only think. This is wonderful, original, and I love what you do. SOme of the pauses and breaks seem out of place, but I really like this.
    | Posted on 2008-02-14 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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