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    dots Submission Name: What My Eyes Sawdots
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    Author: lovemachine
    ASL Info:    17/F/balto,city
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 3/6/10
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 76
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    dotsWhat My Eyes Sawdots
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    My heart is weary it tired of being broken
    I saw him and no words were even spoken
    It wasn't till after that moment I reaized I can't get over him because it was no closure.
    I can't feel any other way about him except love.
    I long to be in his arms I'm tired of the changes, I'm tired of the hauntless dreams of him being intertwined with me
    I love him and he don't love me but what i saw has hurt me truly
    What I saw of him will never be the same and I love him for being just him




    Dedicated to:Kevin Mason,Jr




    Submitted on 2008-02-14 10:06:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Aww, Jackie, no wonder you're in a bad mood today. That is so sad.
    Ok, it may have been a typo, but you spelled "realized" wrong.
    I love the last few lines, but maybe you should have the lines a little even. You have the rhyme scheme going AABCDEEEFB. Most schemes will go

    ABABCDCDEFEF

    OR

    AABBCCDDEEFF

    Or some kind of order. The idea of the poem isn't original, but was still nicely written.

    Happy Valentine's Day

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-02-14 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]



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