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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    today i walked home,

    a gentle breeze touches a blushing earlobe,
    people talking almost in hushed voices,
    words failed to make any message,
    as my soul keeps up to calm footsteps,
    both -
    sharing secrets, playing chinese whispers;

    the rain has dampened this road,
    those yellow lines disappearing,
    the fog faraway create a shadow of dreams,
    as the memories mingle into uncertain future;

    i could hear a heartbeat,
    sometimes slow, sometimes quiet
    sometimes aloud,
    breaking this deafening silence of vein,

    A stray pebble casually tucked in a corner,
    by a lone dog seeking home,
    When day now meets the twilight,
    autumn rain would brush softly
    the new spring leaves -
    almost creating a aura
    angels coming home, everyone suddenly
    smiling,
    and
    in love

    except me -
    a audience,
    seeking a label, some name
    not just there to applause;

    today i walked home,
    from work,
    some forty-five minute.









    Submitted on 2008-02-14 13:53:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, and whats more I understand it, lovely write, meaningful too.

    Always a pleasure, and a pleasure it was again to read your work.

    | Posted on 2008-02-15 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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