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    dots Submission Name: "A Highlands Love Song"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dots"A Highlands Love Song"dots
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    A thoroughbred with nostrils flared
    and mane blown by the wind,
    proudly bore my lady fair
    with blue eyes and ivory skin.

    Her family and mine were feuding,
    and our affair was the greatest sin.
    It could not be known to the elders,
    or to our next of kin.

    Long had we met in the Highlands,
    at a meadow above the bay,
    and lay there in my cabin,
    and loved the night away.

    Our need for secrecy thwarted
    her being escorted on her ride,
    through the hills around my cabin,
    and through an untamed countryside.

    Although rare and rarely seen,
    an occasional Mountain Lion,
    would prey upon the horses,
    that grazed there from time to time.

    Twas at her last departure,
    I heard the Lion's scream,
    and it bolted the spirited thoroughbred
    who fell from the Canyon's Rim.

    Overcome with guilt and sorrow ,
    I carried her to next of kin,
    knowing well that on the morrow,
    they would hang me for my sin.

    Now the winds up in the Highlands
    sing with sad refrain,
    they mourn the fate of lovers,
    and sigh and sing their name.

    Ron Cole
    February 2008




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      Thank you Ron, 'tho sad, this was still a song of love.
    It made me think of another song,
    the father had warned the son to stay away from the indians, for pain would be brought to his life. The boy ignored his fathers warning and fell in love with an indian maiden. When their love was descovered by the father, he had to admit that he was the girls father and the lovers were brother and sister.
    Love should not bring pain or sorrow, but it does happen in real life
    | Posted on 2011-05-19 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Very incredible portrayal of a Scottish Romeo & Juliet. The story is about the pain that sometimes love can bring and the joy of loving. Just really great!
    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-04-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, what can I say?
    this is so beautiful.
    one of the best from you yet, and each of your posts are a treat.
    this one touches deep and we feel real sorrow for the pair.
    outstanding, beautiful and powerful.
    top marks from me.
    you truely are brilliant, Ron!
    michelle xxx

    another one for my favs :)
    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      What a sad and beautiful tale of love Ron.

    Always a pleasure to read your work and this is no exception....

    | Posted on 2008-02-15 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome Ron, I love ballads. Such a sad romantic tale. and beautifully written as usuall. thank you, Jerilynn
    | Posted on 2008-02-14 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
      This story has all the power of a legend, Ron! I felt as if I were there in the highlands like a spirit in the wind watching the whole scenario unfold. I really enjoyed this post tremendously. Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-02-14 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Ron,

    Incredible! Such sorrow and love entwined into the tale of ages. Done with a beautiful twist and through such graceful and majestic animals worthy of such a story.

    I can't say much more - perfection is hard to top

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2008-02-14 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]


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