fell so deep -------------------------------------------
with your touch i cant seem to erase what the feeling felt like
i cant erase your face your love,your lust or touch
noone wanted to see pass my beauty but you
you seemed to take my breath away
you kissed my eyes and told me to sleep
upon your chest you told me to rest on you
you said you'd be my provider and protector you cant protect me from you
your kiss and touch made me quiver
my legs began to shake
i fell and you picked me up with your soft hands
but the thought of you and her made all my feelings fall apart
i woke uo and realized that you left me relaxed
what did you do to make me fall so deep
deep into a sleep to which i slept in peace
man you helped me fall so deep
deep into a nice peaceful slumber but i wonder
The peom itself was really good, but try and use a little more description and higher diction. The emotion was almost there, as in I could almost feel it but not quite.
Submission Name: fell so deep
