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    dots Submission Name: the peace of the lotusdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe peace of the lotusdots

    if we start from the beginning
    a pattern increases
    like a play of pebbles
    on a pond.
    is my life the pebble
    or the wave?

    i suppose
    we all yearn for the crest
    when we're stuck in the trough.

    & i waver
    in the unsteady pursuit of up.
    if i could only see the back of the wave,
    i could move forward into myself
    and leave blue behind.
    to look up for nourishment
    is the way of the child.

    i wish to be above,
    vested in sky
    & staring into a shock of trees.

    my heart is in the blue apples
    of love
    so my body surrenders to these harsh repeating thoughts
    like an island inside me
    so simple.
    so submerged.

    i need to find white branches,
    swaying feet
    & the peace of the lotus around me.

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