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    dots Submission Name: My Heart is my Owndots
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    Author: ravenwolf68
    ASL Info:    40/not enough/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 690/543/62
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 94
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsMy Heart is my Owndots
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    You say that you love only me
    You can talk to me about anything
    And only with me can you be yourself
    But I’m not sure of who you are
    And you don’t even seem to know yourself

    You hold “us” together with your arms
    Arms that have never held my body
    Arms you wrap around some other
    Because of needs I’m too far to fulfill
    You excuse you indiscretions as my fault
    Since I haven’t given in to your claims
    Of loving me while lusting after others

    “Love” is confusing and obscurely defined
    Just when you think you’ve found it
    In some romantic dance of strategy and lie
    You find you’ve only lost your mind

    You can’t love me the way I deserve
    While fulfilling desires with someone else
    I may be a hopeless romantic
    Eager for love and a companion
    But I’m not blind to these games you play
    You don’t love me – you don’t even need me
    Your ego will survive quite well
    Without my notch in your bed

    Sex?
    Maybe
    But my heart remains my own

    ~Ravenwolf




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      Hah I love that. In the beginning, I wanted to cut that persons throat out, but the end made me smile. It's good to have the kind of strength you show here (most people don't).
    And the wording, as usual, is fantastic. You have a perfect way of making a reader feel what you're saying.. which takes a lot of talent.

    "Just when you think you’ve found it
    In some romantic dance of strategy and lie
    You find you’ve only lost your mind"

    That couldn't be more true. I know too well what you mean. I went off the rails (yes, on a crazy train) a few times, myself.

    Once again, there is nothing to critique. I love it.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      hearts are funny creatures. so fickle and wandering and wondering about the past, present and future. myself? i like to think this world is full of divine mischief, full of possibilities and laughter; that whole ethos of living every moment like it was your last has always appealed to me. because, why fret and feel sorrowful over-much? i see people down in the dumps when there are people around them who care very much, if only they would open their minds and hearts a little bit more.

    but what this says to me is: i am my own person. i'll not be stomped under or made to feel like a piece of meat. i am lioness, hear me roar and scratch your eyes out if you piss me off... haha, that sorta thing. i understand and empathise. it's all so fickle and wandering and wondering...
    ~
    | Posted on 2008-02-17 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ]
      So, sex regardless of the torture, eh?

    Thats just what I get from this. You know what I think most people dont know how to do now a days? No one knows how to masturbate properly. Ever hear that crap that doctors and therapists say to justify thier $150 an hour bill? The whole..."You cant take care of someone else unless you learn how to take care of yourself." Mamba jamba???

    Well what they really want to say is learn to masturbate properly and the world will be a better place for you.

    If people would learn how to get themselves off, the world would be a better place, ya know?



    Tell me I am wrong?
    | Posted on 2008-02-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      This last statement provides a very stately summation of the entire poem:

    "Maybe
    But my heart remains my own"!

    Bravo! That literally shouts of independence and courage, both in love and in life!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]



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