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    dots Submission Name: Almostdots
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    Author: Yclipse
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 113/122/53
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsAlmostdots
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    Like a shining sunset, without a hue
    Or a single, unlaced raggedy shoe

    Like a seeing eye dog who cannot see
    The beauty of love has always eluded me

    Like a snowflake narrowly missing a tongue
    An off-key note, just barely sung

    An almost green tree, just in bloom
    A hardly bristled wooden broom

    Like a strait-jacket patient who can still wiggle free
    Love has most often avoided me

    Like a hanging rope, just a tad bit loose
    Or a barely, kind of, sort of truth

    Love is something I’ll never see
    Love means almost nothing to me.




    Submitted on 2008-02-16 15:52:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Charlese, your skill at rhyme and form shines through here. This write of your's really is quite superb in all aspects. The flow was just effortless and so easy on the eye.

    I really am impressed !

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2008-02-25 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      you're verbal imagery in this is amazing.
    i have been surfing around DA and ES and This is some of the better imaging that i have found in a long damn time.

    good use of Similes.
    | Posted on 2008-02-23 00:00:00 | by SonOfDamascus | [ Reply to This ]



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