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    dots Submission Name: Blind by disillusiondots
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    Author: MaxHam
    ASL Info:    20/m/NH USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 60/131/105
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Just a lil somthing off the top of me head hope you like.


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    dotsBlind by disillusiondots
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    They mock and they interrogate.
    They scream and are inappropriate.
    They chase you as your heart pounds.
    They maul your face as you hit the ground.
    They cheat the system and kill all.
    Who are they? They are humans one and all.
    Mankind the one and only.
    Mankind the killers of day, and makers of night.
    Mankind the fugitives of life, the inventors of fright.
    Mankind there is no hope for them.
    Mankind there never was.




    Submitted on 2008-02-16 21:47:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      apparently you haven't led a happy life if you think that mankind if behind all the evil in the world. its not all of mankind just some, we are born innocent and the choices we make help us decide between good and evil. don't shun everyone theres still some nice people out there.
    | Posted on 2008-02-16 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      I am so sorry you have not met any nice people since you came to earth. Your poem give no room for hope. It seems to be written with a great deal of anger and dissolusion. I write like this when I am depressed. It is good however and I will check out your other works for some a bit tamer. thank you for sharing. Jerilynn
    | Posted on 2008-02-16 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]


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