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    dots Submission Name: Cagedots
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    Author: Razor2TheRosary
    ASL Info:    20 - f - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 215/98/41
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 123
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1326



    Description:
       Another conversation with myself.


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    dotsCagedots
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    It isn't only during sleep that death lingers,
    knocking on the closet door you vomit behind
    while rocking back and forth like an addict each night,
    hiding from spiders that try to crawl toward your spine...
    But shovels seem too far away to remember
    how so many scratches have damaged plastic flesh.
    Blood hardens on your leg as laughter increases,
    and this old storage space becomes a prison cell.

    We used to go dancing in the attic, but now
    it would take a funeral to pull you away
    from the ritualistic decapitation
    of a happiness that just wasn't worth keeping...
    And shadows fill the corners of your wasted mind
    reflecting the knives you forgot to let go of.
    Visions become blurry, out of focus, and dull
    until morning turns into one more broken vow.

    Your black lungs inflate with cancerous pollution,
    finding salvation in obscene deliverance.
    The dark hall outside of your cage has no ending,
    but demons are willing to walk it forever...
    And sunlight doesn't matter anymore because
    slashed and lashed mistakes call for the death penalty.
    Now walls spin faster as the ceiling collapses,
    crushing all hope to bestow eternal freedom.




    Submitted on 2008-02-17 00:06:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      madness...
    in the book ive been storing lines hoping they'd turn themselves into a poem i have 'a happiness that isnt worth keeping' which features in your poem... i love it when that happens... i have no idea how it does but it does... great minds think alike or something

    morning turns into one more unbroken vow and sunshine means nothing anymore...

    im not usually one for dark poetry. it scares me. but usually dark poetry all sounds the same and this piece you have here doesnt sound like all the others... youve bought a new light to the darkness perhaps?

    your imagery has moments of absolute brilliance and beauty even though the content of the piece seems to be without hope...

    good write.
    | Posted on 2008-02-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      once again...you never fail me! so capturing, so captivating, so decapitating! made me want to find an attic/addict and a rocking chair and terrorize them! you have such a way with conveying a message that is unlike any i've read, which is why you are my most fascinating person! you take a person to a different place in this write and set the mood perfectly...then show them diferent scenes as in a movie... one by one...so many different pictures you paint with each little experience! it's so good i wanna be locked in a mental instution just for the hell of it :) nothing but compliments as this is perfect the way it is! thnx for sharing another piece history in the life of you <3
    | Posted on 2008-02-17 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      You and Tim Burton are related aren't you?

    Excellent conversation and write. That vivid dark description captured in each line - leaves no room for just one or two favorites - they all ring with a liking to my mind.

    Inspiration never seems to fail you and your dark and deep writing carries such intense meanings - I like - a lot.

    Well done (as usual)
    | Posted on 2008-02-17 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]



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