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    dots Submission Name: This Is Not Thank Youdots
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    Author: Piper
    ASL Info:    17/ Female/ Europe
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 31/41/27
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 102
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 600



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    dotsThis Is Not Thank Youdots
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    I feel guilty and ashamed
    For all the things I've done
    I cried on your shoulder
    And I knew you're not the one.

    You are someone else,
    And you won't stay for long
    You refused to help me, so it seems
    But I'm still staying strong.

    I don't want to talk,
    And I don't want to cry
    I don't want to smile,
    And I don't want to die.

    I am not you
    And I will never be,
    So forget about the things I said,
    And just let me be free.





    Submitted on 2008-02-17 01:39:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      For some reason, this doesn't seemed finished. I liked the rhythm and everything, and you did very well on setting up the story, but the ending just didn't feel like the end. Maybe in real life you haven't found the end to the story, and that's why it feels like that, but, yeah...that was the only major problem I found.

    Cheers,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2008-02-19 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]



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