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    dots Submission Name: the ghosts of surrenderdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe ghosts of surrenderdots

    i've been rolling the blood off my tongue
    in the hopes of finding cranes inside.
    but "this beautiful black marriage"
    won't yield until all the stars are buried,
    the crystals are cut
    & the hurricane of my eye
    becomes still in the memory
    of itself.

    i find precious moments
    & hold on
    as if the wind itself
    could do no harm
    to cherished thought.
    & in small futures
    i rest my tired eyes
    & wonder.

    i bleed out into the trees
    & the leaves beneath me.
    i feel storms
    surging from my mouth
    & through my teeth.
    i speak of the sun
    & the inmost light
    inside me.

    i need pale breath
    & red angels
    in the bush of tangle.
    if you could just sit there
    & here me speak forever,
    just to be near me,
    perhaps the ghosts of surrender
    would collapse.

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