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Liar


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 73
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Description:




Liar



These salty selfish tears
Drop onto the fine print
0f a contract
I so blindly signed-
Lists of should haves
Clutter my table
The ideal end
Is now only
A blueprint in my mind.
Staring at the shambles in front of me
Hurt because the mansion failed to be
I rustle through my pockets
Searching for riches-
but finding a dime
I realise with time-
It'll become easier to forgive the lie




Submitted on 2008-02-17 07:34:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It is truly a shame no one has commented as yet on this very well constucted and imagery-rich poem. Well, now someone has done it! You spent very few words and offered a very intense word-picture to the reader of emotional bankruptcy.

I am impressed at your penmanship (or penwomanship if you prefer)

Well done!


The Gadfly
| Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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