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Shine Bright


Author: ashik
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Words: 48
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Shine Bright



There has been a star,
Raised high into the heavens,
Guiding and protecting,
We follow and adore.
Many times ore vision becomes clouded,
We fear it's gone

But this star,
Holy and caring,
reaches down to touch our hearts.
Raises our heads and,
allows us to see.




Submitted on 2008-02-17 11:40:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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