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    dots Submission Name: Bear trap bluesdots

    Author: mickash
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2/0/2
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBear trap bluesdots

    Caught in a snare upon a hill,
    A bear trap.
    Watching the madness from above like the sole surviving archangel.
    The reality of it all becomes a vision of torture.
    Work hard to fulfill your true potential, work hard to cleanse your soul and save society.
    The dawn breaks , and the ocean basks in the morning sun.
    Golden rooftops and the church steeple appear in the vally to bid farewell to the night.
    Children play on baked streets with melting tar.
    An ancient Romanian queen sitting on upturned fruit boxs is stripped bare and placed on a corner.
    Destined to die of a broken heart.
    A priest tries to revive a hobo with smelling salts, while a policeman checks him for change.
    The poets are ghosts and the lovers void of emotion.
    Statues in time.
    The world as seen from a bear trap.

    Submitted on 2008-02-17 12:38:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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