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    dots Submission Name: Make It Out Alive (For Kate)dots
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    Author: lebeauvide
    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 75/295/165
    Words: 299
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 820
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1922



    Description:
       A friend of mine was in a car wreck, and is now in serious condition. I am praying for her.


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    dotsMake It Out Alive (For Kate)dots
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    It's all finished, it's all gone
    The ghost of a girl stands alone
    On the edge of a highway
    Bleeding and wondering if she'll ever make it home
    It's all over, it's all done
    She stands in the wreckage of what has become
    Perhaps the last moments of her life
    That the world will ever see

    {But who are we
    To say that she won't make it?
    Maybe she'll be strong enough
    To make it out alive
    But who is she
    To let go of this life?
    To take everything that she'd been given
    And leave it all behind?}

    It's all black, it's all bruised
    She doesn't know what else to do
    But to stand there and wait
    For someone to help her through
    It's all faded, it's all torn
    All her feelings have been worn
    On her sleeves for far too long
    And now they've been thrown away

    {But who are we
    To say that she won't make it?
    Maybe she'll be strong enough
    To make it out alive
    But who is she
    To let go of this life?
    To take everything that she'd been given
    And leave it all behind?}

    It's all burning, it's all in flames
    The remnants of the games she played
    And the things that tied her to this earth
    Have all been burned away
    It's all quiet, it's all still
    And now there is a space to fill
    In the shape of a girl who took her life
    And crumbled it in her hands.

    {But who are we
    To say that she won't make it?
    Maybe she'll be strong enough
    To make it out alive
    But who is she
    To let go of this life?
    To take everything that she'd been given
    And leave it all behind?}




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