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    dots Submission Name: Brieflydots

    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Love visits, stays for a twilight,
    leaves early, almost like a falling star,

    Like a untold story, a saga,
    of tears, pain and happiness ending
    in a mere moment,
    love never stays,
    self need to be clever,
    naiveness - tale unexisted,
    he said,
    soul less, matter-of-factly
    a lost orchid on spring day;
    when he arrived,
    hugs and kisses - a favourite song,
    of lovefilled day,
    when smile had a reason,
    alas! tears remained,
    almost like a buffoon to a wise soul,
    laughable, hysterically funny;

    random thoughts put together,
    randomness of souls
    ending in unconnected verses,
    like tears lost and found
    in zigzags of life - unsettled,
    so confused,
    when you left,
    took my soul with you -
    so briefly!
    i am soul-less now,
    so painfully scattered -
    in those short moments of breath -
    living briefly - clueless,
    loving scaringly - if that's the word!
    my life now.
    wondering - can love do that to anyone?!
    or is it just me?!

    Submitted on 2008-02-17 17:12:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think no experience in life can bring more joy, more exhiliration, more comfort that love; and, when gone awry, nothing can bring more heartache, misery, and pain!

    This is a wonderful bit of prose on the most difficult and complex subject that us poets write about, and that is ..... Love!

    This is beautifully complex, tender, and sensual; it is myraid, involved, and confusing, like love itself can be!
    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This is... I don't know. So emotional, powerfull, touching... I loved it, and it's definitely going on my fav list.

    "Love visits, stays for a twilight,
    leaves early, almost like a falling star,"

    Beautiful. Simply beautiful.

    Best of luck. :)

    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by Piper | [ Reply to This ]

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