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    dots Submission Name: vampire's foray into human minddots
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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1085
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 860



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       Something silly.


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    dotsvampire's foray into human minddots
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    sometimes you need an arm around you
    to take the edge off
    skin hunger



    ~an arm will do;
    a neck even better,
    for hunger




    and someone to dry your tears



    ~and to drain you dry
    of blood




    sometimes you just need somebody



    ~yes, I just need some body...
    any body...













    Submitted on 2008-02-18 00:44:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really different. I like the individuality of the lines. It almost seems like a conversation. Good work!! Jerilynn
    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, really I do, I'm not to much into the dark writing myself, doesn't mean I can't appreciate it and the humor to in this along with a reach out made for a good poem.

    I like.

    Love,
    Me
    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, you. and you said you weren't sad. been reading vampire novels, have you? i read quite a few anne rice books once... that was my experience in that genre.

    so, why would you want someone to drain you dry of blood? icky. and rather messy, y'know...
    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ]


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