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    dots Submission Name: Of Deeper Hurtsdots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Venting
    Total Views: 624
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       Because my best friend that is a guy l ikes my best friend that is a girl, and now all mad chaos has broken loose.


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    dotsOf Deeper Hurtsdots
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    I can't blame you,
    for falling for her,
    she's my bestfriend,
    of course I think she's wonderful.

    But what type of guy,
    uses another girl,
    to get to that special one?
    can't wait till you're left empty.

    Sure, it was only friendship,
    sure, it didn't mean that much,
    but memories become crystals now,
    such high resolution on certain parts.

    A lot of things make sense,
    and each is as sneaky as the last.
    No, I don't blame you for you feelings,
    but I blame you for lack of notice of me.

    I am human, I hurt too,
    I sometimes cry at night,
    and sometimes I get betrayed.
    Like you hurt and betrayed me.

    Good luck with her,
    I'm stepping out now.
    Not that it mattered before,
    but now, no more use and abuse.




    Submitted on 2008-02-18 07:18:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Boys are dumb.
    | Posted on 2008-02-24 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]
      well....i like what you have to say here. it is like a conversation, so it reads very easily, even without any rhyming. it was deep and honest, and kind of calls the reader to think about their own responsibilities to the people they call friends...about where their loyalty is. thanks for sharing this and i wish you well. someday, there will be someone...and YOU... will the ONLY one :) take care...

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    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]


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