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    dots Submission Name: Without You, I Am Medots
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    Author: lebeauvide
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 75/179/84
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    dotsWithout You, I Am Medots
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    I hear your voice
    In the darkness, in the night
    And I know it's my choice
    But what if I don't choose right?
    Where else can I go,
    Since I've made your heart my home?
    You threw me out
    And locked the door behind me

    {Who am I...
    Without you in my life?
    Who am I without you?
    I'm nobody, that's who.
    Nobody, that's who}

    How can I sleep
    When you're always standing over me?
    Are you making sure
    That I'm not going to leave?
    And you know I can't breathe
    With your hands around my neck
    I'm sinking slowly...
    You're suffocating me, but-

    {Who am I...
    Without you in my life?
    Who am I without you?
    I'm nobody, that's who.
    Nobody, that's who}

    I've buried myself
    In this ever-growing hole
    And I'd sell myself
    If I could rescue you from Hell
    But what does
    It mean
    If you wouldn't do the same for me?

    {Who am I...
    Without you in my life?
    Who am I without you?
    I don't know what to do...
    I can't run away from you...}




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      Very nice job, I like the lyrics very much. I could see it definitely in a rock song, I agree with Rene, I could see it in a Three Days Grace song as well. I'ts very hard to be in a relationship where you feel like you're nothing without the other person. Like their life revolves around yours and you cannot live without them. I've been in situations like that... The best thing to do is stand up, and never lose yourself in someone else... Overall great job :)

    Cris
    | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds a lot like a three days grace song. You should really consider putting music to this. Very angry, very sad. Which, based on the genre, seems to be what you were going for. So, mission accomplished!
    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by Renč Magrete | [ Reply to This ]


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