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    dots Submission Name: By the Birdsdots
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    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 22/20/25
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
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    dotsBy the Birdsdots
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    Earth quaked beneath me
    In the mirror, I did see
    Not myself, not my face
    A deep hole, falling out of grace
    And I bit myself, bit through my skin
    Worked the blood out
    Didn't care if I sinned
    Didn't give a damn
    Began to slam
    DOORS
    Felt like a whore
    Told myself no more BUT
    Fuck that
    Cause who cares?
    Who will be there?
    You and you
    And you
    But where did YOU go?
    Ran away from me again
    Down the cherry lane
    Off to see the wizard
    Went to steal his lizard
    And put her in the trash
    Never came back
    Never said goodbye
    Left her high and dry
    Sitting in a can
    On the curb
    To be picked at by the birds

    Said you'd save her
    Said you'd love her
    That you'd always be there
    But you're nowhere near
    And now she's afraid
    Cause everything is turning gray




    Submitted on 2008-02-18 11:54:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very interesting. this made me feel like i was in a dream. like it would never end. i like this stlye of writing, kind of all over the place. i'll be checking out more of your stuff.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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