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the star between your eyes

Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 53
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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the star between your eyes

skip skulls across the water in your sleep.
black lips, sink black ships
& the evening knows
that the only path to heaven
is through the tainted heart.
& the kiss that you missed
slips as it tips
towards the moonlight
in the dark.

death is the blank space
between sta rs.

Submitted on 2008-02-18 15:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it makes me think of spring. of change. of things i've done, of things i should be ashamed of but am not, it reminds me of the time when i was free, when i was myself. thank you. i havent felt that in a long time
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