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    dots Submission Name: the star between your eyesdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe star between your eyesdots

    skip skulls across the water in your sleep.
    black lips, sink black ships
    & the evening knows
    that the only path to heaven
    is through the tainted heart.
    & the kiss that you missed
    slips as it tips
    towards the moonlight
    in the dark.

    death is the blank space
    between sta rs.

    Submitted on 2008-02-18 15:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it makes me think of spring. of change. of things i've done, of things i should be ashamed of but am not, it reminds me of the time when i was free, when i was myself. thank you. i havent felt that in a long time
    | Posted on 2008-03-10 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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