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    dots Submission Name: Boundlessdots
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    Author: ARoomOfMyOwn
    ASL Info:    18/Female/N/A
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 6/9/7
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 753
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1084



    Description:
       Someone I knew sat through a rather humbling sermon. The preist marveled at the beauty of their house of worship, remarking that his church didn't even have a roof.


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    We had no roof, so we took shelter under faith.
    No home, so we slept under knowledge,
    The newspaper stands scattered through town.
    No heat, so we burned love for warmth,
    We were given no place to rightfully live, so we made our own,
    No place to peacefully die, so we lived.

    And with no roof, our prayers lifted to heaven,
    No brick to cap our dreams.
    With no home, we knew no chains,
    So we lived free.
    And without heat to chase the cold from our bones,
    We huddled together for warmth,
    And my body became yours, our souls became one,
    And we knew no hate.
    With no place given to live,
    We bound ourselves not to rule, but to one another,
    Found kneeling to nothing but ourselves and the God
    We chose.
    With no place, no time, no luxury to die,
    We raised ourselves from the streets,
    From the slums, from the beds of our masters:
    Men
    Fear
    Anger
    Pain
    And we lived.




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      rather humbling indeed. my goodness. so let me ask you this; you wrote this based on what the someone you knew told you about the sermon? or...?
    either way this is amazing stuff.
    "no place to peacefully die, so we lived."
    OMGoodness. really. not even kidding.
    humbling and inspirational and moving and...
    (worthless comment, sorry)
    wow.
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]


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