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    dots Submission Name: i saw the white treesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsi saw the white treesdots
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    it is the strong of heart
    that knows that there is no right time
    to feel.
    but plenty of wrong times
    to not.

    i saw the white trees
    of the field undisturbed
    & i sunk into them
    wondering what velleity obscured us.
    & i find the answer
    in the lugubrious air around me.

    i am stacked
    in the embers of mystics
    watching myself
    belabor the obscure.
    herons palm at me
    with their cloudy eyes.

    & i want nothing more
    than to defenestrate
    the sentiments in my mind.
    to move on through the night forest
    without the punctilio of the exacting heart.
    but there are so many tunnels in the wood
    & i find colourful noises
    soundtracks to a haunting thought.

    i'm searching for a amenable compromise
    to things i can't describe.
    is there some flavor,
    or some touching remark
    to free one from such uxorious lament?

    there is always a right time to feel
    when everything matters to someone.

    the breath of the night is sleeping
    & i'm tired in it.




    Submitted on 2008-02-19 04:43:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is beautiful poetry. the opening stanza was truely amazing. the only critique i really have is that i didnt really like the repition of obscured and obscure in the second and third stanzas.

    keep it up!
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by stasisindarknes | [ Reply to This ]


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