A Needle Point Life

Author: ashik Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 50 /37 /31 Words: 57

Class/Type: Poetry /Misc Total Views: 781 Average Vote:    4.0000 Bytes: 364

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A Needle Point Life

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In my cage as the sun rises; I sit, stare into a nothingness. Suffocated by the stillness. Standing on the gaff of my younger summer’s mist. Dreams of gag roots, peace, and a time of gaiety, Keeping in harmony with the stillness. Only to break it with a deep outward sigh. Then becoming one again.

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This is a very nicely structured little poem. And I don't mean little in a condescending way- I mean little as in- it is short. I really enjoy the structure of it and like the first 3 and last 3 lines... I have a problem with the middle 2 lines though... Okay- I am all for the word "gaiety", but "gaff"??? You lost me there... Did you mean the Nautical gaff? Or as in to rig or cheat? I don't know, for me; the one word threw me out of the entire poem... I'm also not fully aware of the term or thing that is a "gag root"? I tried looking it up so as to derive some meaning from this but alas... -no results. If you could explain, that would be super!!! It could just be my own ignorance keeping me from fully realizing this submission... But that's okay, I'll admit it. *love and light* -Ceyx

| Posted on 2008-04-06 00:00:00 | by Ceyx | [ Reply to This ]

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