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    dots Submission Name: Have You Told Anyone About Us?dots
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    Author: amrslamr
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 18/18/16
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 654
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 437



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       That question that tells you your relationship has moved a little farther along.


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    Have You Told Anyone About Us?
    amrslamr
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    Have you told anyone about us?
    I asked him yesterday.
    He reacted like I thought he might:
    Cleared his throat and looked away

    “You wanted to know the truth,” I thought,
    “Well, brace yourself. Here it comes.”
    But he looked at me with a sheepish grin
    And said, “I’ve told everyone.”




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      whoa... whoa.. i don't know about only girls and gay guys. but i like this it actually reminds me a litle but of something i wrote, just the feeling of it that is. but anyhow the flow is a little chopped up, but the actually feel deserves it anyway because it's like short spurts of emotion pulsing out. or maybe that's just the way i read it. i read about 5 times. it kept me coming back. and you do that very thing every time.
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      The single most sweet thing I have read in weeks, no lie. I don't know why, or at least won't say, but this piece touched me a whole lot. The title, and author, made me curious, and then the piece, short sweet and charming, made me go awww in that way that only girls and truly feminine gay guys seem to have.

    Wonderful

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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