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Souvenir from Aldevinco


Author: Suven7
ASL Info:    20 female Fla
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Words: 97
Class/Type: Prose /Nostalgia
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My sentimental musings on a bracelet I brought back with me from the Philippines.


Souvenir from Aldevinco



The ends of her bracelet dangle
From her wrist – a delicate
Brown wrought in native fiber.

One end has come undone,
Splaying many clumps
And looking even more
Rugged than usual.

It would fit her well
To wear it only when her
Sleeves are short enough
For it to show, but winter
Is neverending, summer
Slow in surmounting its place.

It’s good enough that the
Big smiling sun – etched on
Synthetic wood – on the
Bracelet peeks out at the
World once in a while.




Submitted on 2008-02-19 18:51:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The first several stanzas are very descriptive and definitely bring that 'perspective' element to the table. My favorite stanza was the last though...
It’s good enough that the
Big smiling sun – etched on
Synthetic wood – on the
Bracelet peeks out at the
World once in a while.
This is where you brought both your observations and your odd insight together and easily established a deeper meaning...that didn't seem forced either.

I really like this poem...it's syntactical structure and use of imagery make this one of my favorites in your recent "quick" series :D

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Love - Olah
| Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by Olah89 | [ Reply to This ]


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