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    dots Submission Name: When Anger Knocksdots
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    Author: Suven7
    ASL Info:    18 female Fla
    Elite Ratio:    7.1 - 477/259/47
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       Am I seriously the only one angry enough to write about being angry?


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    dotsWhen Anger Knocksdots
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    When he gets angry …
    There is a rushing, flaming,
    Ball of red ache that shoots up
    To the back of his eyeballs.

    It sits there like a natural
    Noose, throbbing, robbing him of reason,
    Of joy, of function. And leaves him
    Alone in a dark place – a heaving
    Mass of barely conjoined pieces of
    his old self.

    When he gets angry …
    There is not an unkind word
    He will spare you from.
    His tongue does the book
    Of James full justice.

    The scariest thing when he
    Gets angry, though,
    Is the silence.

    He just sits there,

    Far away
    And you know
    That his mind is empty,
    Except for the gnashing,
    Vengeful, black and red
    Thoughts that bite in
    The dark.




    Submitted on 2008-02-19 19:08:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      >.> <.< I hope there wasn't any inspiration here connected to me :(. But then again, it was very well written and very interesting.

    You'd think "his" wrath would be the sacriest part of the episode...however, you make it clear that

    The scariest thing when he
    Gets angry, though,
    Is the silence.

    I wonder why this is...anticipation maybe? or rather that "he" is angry to the point words can't describe?

    I hate anger.
    Love - Olah
    | Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by Olah89 | [ Reply to This ]
      
    i haven,t read any poems on this site about anger. i enjoyed reading yours, the descriptions and images are really good.

    When he gets angry …
    There is not an unkind word
    He will spare you from.
    His tongue does the book
    Of James full justice

    i liked these lines,(isn.t ther a saying something about heed the wrath of an angry man? or i have i heard that in german???)
    this stanza says a lot about an angry person, his or her actions, spontanious,letting words fly out that somehow they really don,t mean and later when they have calmed down start regretting it. maybe that,s the silence part you are talking about, when the anger calms down then the return of rational thinking.
    and that person is probably more angry with himself than with the" victim"
    much enjoyed
    take care
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
      anger...what a powerful emotion! scarcely is there any righteous anger these days, it's mostly self-indulging, i have done it myself many times to my own downfall. this reminded me of how angry i used to get over stupid people doing stupid things i had no control over. it made me think that i have an enemy who hates me, but that i hate even more. the book of James...very good book indeed. i memorized the whole first chapter.


    "And you know
    That his mind is empty,
    Except for the gnashing,
    Vengeful, black and red
    Thoughts that bite in
    The dark"..... i thought was a good ending to this piece. thnx for sharing, take care...

    w
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]



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