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    dots Submission Name: Today, On the Today Showdots
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    Author: Imadjinn
    ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 329/334/138
    Words: 340
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       With my Condolences to all in DeKalb Illinois


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    dotsToday, On the Today Showdots
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    "Today on the Today Show, a man shoots and kills
    7 people at NorthWestern Illinois University,
    Wounding 17 others..."

    My Television spouts this trash at me at Seven in the Morning.
    I am getting ready for school myself at [Unidentified] High, but
    this message sends a chill down my spine. We all have to be afraid.
    Afraid to walk the halls of our own schools.
    Afraid to walk the halls of our own Lives.

    "...Before Turning the gun on himself..."

    Somehow I wish we could go back to the good old days, when suicides where
    you take a bunch of innocent people with you weren't so trendy.
    Does that makes me a bad person?
    There used to be a time when one could go years in between a school shooting.
    Now we are lucky if we go months.

    Sometimes I wonder how close to home things like this are. Just a few weeks
    ago somebody stenciled the words "[Undisclosed] is a bitch" on to my desk.
    Some people want to blame Video Games.
    Some people want to blame Movies.
    It's so much easier to say 'Oh, those Brainwashed him', than to say that
    society itself is messed up, People don't take care of each other, Teachers
    aren't in Control, There is rampant Bullying, and No parents at home because
    they have to work two jobs.
    After Staring at the stenciled words in my desk, I wonder how long it will
    be before we have...

    "...The Shooter Burst into the Classroom with a loaded shotgun, and a pistol,
    unloading two shots into the audience..."

    My mind wanders as I make a note in my head to say hello to [Undisclosed],
    and tell her that she's alright by me. Maybe it's just one person, but who
    knows.
    I hear the rampant sounds on the television, but my eyes lie outside.
    In the outside world, where I have to be afraid. I look up in the sky...

    "...And now to Al for the Weather"




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      I never read anything that had so much emotion and truthfullness in it. (I'm not even sure if truthfullness is even a word, but it fits in this situation).
    The thing that pissed me off is I was interrupted twice by my teacher (I'm in class right now).
    This has you stuck to reading it from the first line. And you are right, it is sad that people can't even go to school and be safe anymore. There is probably more chaos in the school than there is in the real world.
    The thing I like is that I can actually see you waking up in the morning and getting ready while the news is one. Its really sad.
    But this was really well written and I can't really think of any corrections you can make.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      I read the title and thought that this was going to be a funny piece, but I realized slowly (my face let me know, as my smile at the title slowly turned into a straight faced, eye widening...being) that it wasn't. Very serious , very true, very raw. No reservations. Nice.
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by Renč Magrete | [ Reply to This ]
      I was lucky enough to catch Gus Van Sant's "Elephant" last year and I have to say that high school can really be tragic sometimes. It has the power to be one of the best experiences of your life and it also has the power to be one of the worst. I think that one of the primary reasons is that the people who go through highschool are at a very fragile stage. A lot of them are not mature enough to know how to handle life to the extent that they clash against the other students.

    And what's really awful is that, sometimes, even the slightest things like cutting in line or forgetting to flush the toilet can lead to complete social ruin. It's all so shallow yet a great extent of it reflects the way life works. It's really sad.

    Anyway, what I like most about your poem is the voice you chose to use to create it. To me, this is very appropriate because it's not pretentious, it is mostly well structured and it really shows fear at it's simplest of forms. It's like a kid being forced to write something about it. It has a strong sense of reality to it and I think it made your piece quite moving.
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really a scary world we live in, and the problem is worldwide, here in south Africa the killings is more about Politics, racial indifference, gangs, or just plain poverty but nonetheless it's a reality. The crime is getting closer and closer. Its no more about something you heard about, but it's something you see, someone you know. Its getting really scary.


    I think you are right, everyone blames everything, but never stop to realize it begins with them. If we do not start at schools and at home, this brewing war will only get worst.

    Touching write, and back to you.
    Johan
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]
      scary mother effer of a world we be livin in eh?
    guess we keep doing what we do or we don't. are their any other options?
    only else i can say is chin up and look out for the smallers. maybe if we all took a little more time out of our oh so busy schedules to lend a hand or even a kind word...
    well who knows? hmmm...what might we accomplish if "he was such a quiet kid" was heard? hmmm...
    crazy, scary, mother.
    | Posted on 2008-02-19 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]


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