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    dots Submission Name: who am Idots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    17/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 38/53/34
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotswho am Idots
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    Who am I but an empty shell
    I look in the mirror but can not tell.
    Walking under the blacken sky.
    Watching life just pass me by.
    I Never question or wonder why.
    I wish for death but never die.
    I yell until my lungs content.
    Standng there unconfident.
    who am I but an empty shell.
    I look in the mirror but can not tell.




    Submitted on 2008-02-20 09:34:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I found this write to be extremely sad
    I too My Friend have fought most of my life with depression and I know exactly how painful it is
    I have a Love affair with Mirror Poetry and you My Friend quite easily captured the art of a mirror poem with this write
    If you ever need someone to talk to dont be afraid to PM me I Promise I will answer back
    Great Work!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

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    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderfully writen :)
    My critiques-
    qeustion - question
    wounder - wonder

    Other than those minor flaws of spelling, I really like this piece.

    Good job
    -Shadow Doll
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think we all ask ourselves this question several times in our lives. Finding yourself and who you are is a tough journey. Hopefully you like the person you become. Good write.
    </3 lisa
    (by the way, in the ninth line you left out the word "I". just so you know.)
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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