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    dots Submission Name: Make It Sodots
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    Author: Quin
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 39/39/21
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 890
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1125



    Description:
       Little lullaby.


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    dotsMake It Sodots
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    Let me take it,
    Let it take me;
    strangle out the chords
    that make up my mind.

    Never have I been more definite
    about anything before.
    Look into my eyes:
    Is there doubt? Uncertainty?

    I will take the dawn,
    make it mine,
    make it ours.
    I will face the sun,
    I will face the moon.
    Talk it through,
    me and you.
    I will sing the stars alight
    forever when I sleep near you.
    Its true….
    Make it so, my love,
    Make it so.

    Let it take you,
    let it steal me;
    free up the clutter
    that makes up my mind.

    Is there such a thing
    as too much for comfort?
    Or is there simply
    Happiness and sorrow?

    I will take the dawn,
    make it mine
    make it ours.
    I will face the sun,
    I will face the moon.
    Talk it through,
    me and you.
    I will sing the stars alight
    forever when I sleep near you.
    Its true….
    Make it so, my love,
    Make it so.





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