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    dots Submission Name: Who Killed Hip-Hop?dots
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    Author: 7makaveli
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 36/43/50
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWho Killed Hip-Hop?dots
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    Do not go exploring the the depths of your wisdom
    Corporate America has simply found its newest victim
    Rooted in the art of contractual negotiations
    Artists have forgotten their moral obligations
    The deterioration is visible through lyrical evaluation
    justifying why you're "hot" does not take imagination
    Gone are the days of storytellers and sophistication
    Simply make up a dance and become an overnight sensation
    I agree that the craft did not come with a set of instructions
    Opened the door for a scrawny li'l "Soulja" of destruction
    Although, no singly entity is responsible for this tragedy
    As you can see, it is the undesired product of apathy
    Society needs an authentic expression through its cultural arts
    Not some record executives with sights on the charts
    Hip-Hop is not Crunk, nor Snap, nor Pop
    It is an inspirational reservior that fills the empty pots
    However, this identity crisis has rendered it lifeless
    When one stares into the dark they will likely think they're sightless
    Believe me, hope comes before ignorance and other vices
    A generation is starving for knowledge let us revive it
    So as long as you and I are out there rhymin' well, Hip-hop may be somewhere alive and well




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      I love the theme of this poem, I really do, but I don't personally like the way it was put together. Your word fluctuation was good, but I feel that the format was a little to restrictive to the piece. You say a lot of true and powerful things about hip hop here, and I really like the piece overall.
    | Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]
      Decent not the best pieces of rhymes of seen but it's decent. it's truth i hate souljsboy, his songs demean wemon and just are dumb as it is. Truth is something you can never criticize cause with your rhymes and all, i'm right there with you mentally. I've been saying this for years.
    | Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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