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    dots Submission Name: Remembering Youdots
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    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 844
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       to someone who still holds a piece of me to this day


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    dotsRemembering Youdots
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    sitting here today,
    thoughts of you fill my head,
    wondering what i could say,
    to be able to have you to hold once again.

    remembering the times we had,
    the moments we shared,
    remembering that first kiss,
    and how i was so scared.

    maybe i could've done things differently,
    maybe i didn't do enough,
    to this day i'm wondering,
    how i lost your love.

    at first things were so good,
    i felt things i thought i would never feel,
    it was my heart that you took,
    the way i felt was surreal.

    i remember the very first "i love you",
    and when we said goodbye,
    when you told me i was the only one,
    and when you said i wasn't the right guy.

    i keep your pictures,
    to this very day,
    hoping you will come back,
    and tell me it's all okay.

    i will always love you,
    and that will never change,
    a big piece of my heart will always be yours,
    and no one can ever take that away.

    i don't have forever,
    so come back soon,
    so i can once again feel your touch,
    so i can once again hold you.

    i'm waiting......




    Submitted on 2008-02-20 17:27:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im sorry is it ok that this mad me cry. wow i mean it was heartflet and well writen. i love the way i could feel/see the sadness and the love in this. you seem like a very amazing writer. this reminded me of someone i am in love with and have been in love with for about 4 years. to day he loves so many other girls. i mean my story may not be ur poem word for word but it was very close. wow amazing job keep up the good work and i look forward to reading others writen by u. comment som of mine (spelling may be off on mine but thats cuz i write way to fast) lol.
    _tayla_ aka sickofhurting U
    | Posted on 2008-02-23 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]


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