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    dots Submission Name: Wait Don't Waitdots
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    Author: Quin
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 39/39/21
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1026
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1768



    Description:
       A song I had in mind - I even have the music. Unfortunately, punctuation and such have been sacrificed for convenience and flow. So don't comment on that. Please.


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    dotsWait Don't Waitdots
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    Sit and wait
    On the sidelines
    Have a taste
    Of our fine wines
    That lay all around
    Your last wishes, and dreams.

    Drink it slowly,
    Taste the flavor
    And weíll talk
    On the table
    Underneath your clothes
    After allÖwho knows?

    This is night
    And day
    In stereo
    Itís waking
    Dreaming
    And all the world will
    Watch with us
    And come with us
    So donít hesitate
    To tell the truth
    And lay back to
    enjoy your youth
    Itís fading fast
    Too good to last

    When weíre done
    We will answer
    All those scintillating questions
    Whose idea was the napkin,
    When weíve got perfectly good clothes?

    The sidelines
    Are a thing of the past
    And we are
    Far too good to last
    And since we know this
    Why donít we
    Flat out run, run, run away?

    This is night
    And day
    In stereo
    Itís waking
    Dreaming
    And all the world will
    Watch with us
    And come with us
    So donít hesitate
    To tell the truth
    And lay back to
    enjoy your youth
    Itís fading fast
    Too good to last

    Itís not luck
    Or fate
    Or anything else
    Because our limbs entwine
    Without any help
    From angels
    Or demons
    Or liars and believers.
    We have no one to tell us the truth.
    --
    Temporary
    Is where we are, but
    Weíll walk out
    Into the darkness
    And lose ourselves
    Amidst our trees
    and silhouettes
    We'll lie here.
    Forever.




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