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    dots Submission Name: *takes 10 confusion damage*dots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 874
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 364



    Description:
       (to:you) I'm lost and alone with you. With him there was someone.
    (to:ES people) Umm I don't know anymore I'm tired of feeling so confused and upset.


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    dots*takes 10 confusion damage*dots
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    Why does it hurt,
    to look at you?
    Why can't I,
    close my eyes?

    Why does your voice,
    make me ache?
    Why do I,
    want to cry?

    I have someone,
    that loves me.
    Yet all I think,
    about is you.

    What is going on,
    in my head?
    What am I,
    to do?




    Submitted on 2008-02-21 09:31:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a good poem. i like the idea behind it. i have felt this way before so ur not alone. actually thats one reason y my bf left me (along with others that wernt to nice) well anyway i liked it. it helped me to feel like im not that only one whos been like that..nice job

    _tayla_aka SickOfHurting U
    | Posted on 2008-08-29 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]


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