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    dots Submission Name: Mental transfermationdots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    17/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 38/53/34
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsMental transfermationdots
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    I have a strong desire to accomplish.

    The fear of vanity no longer hovers over me.

    I do not ask for hoom the bell tolls cause the bell tolls for me.

    I walk in the shadow with no fear of the darkness.

    I feel the cold bitter wind brush agenst my bare skin.

    I walk amoung mortals and I learn to bare there rotten smell of greed, enyv, and other inpure thoughts.

    I am a single demon walking down an empty path with not direction or destination.

    I have learn to atone and live on.




    Submitted on 2008-02-21 09:39:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the message in this write is good, but many spelling errors are all through out the poem. i know i said that about a poem of yours before, it's just a big pet peeve of mine. the line:
    "I walk in the shadow with no fear of the darkness." reminds me of that verse in the bible "though i walk through the valley of the shadow of death, i shall fear no evil." interesting. well good luck.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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