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    dots Submission Name: paralyzeddots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    17/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 38/53/34
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
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    dotsparalyzeddots
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    I'm stuck in place with no where to go.

    I live no past or future only the present.

    Held in place by the thoughts that hold me down.

    I'm at the point in my life when nothing matters any more but myself and my thought

    It's like a perest eating away at my reality, my being, and everything I stand for.

    I will soon open my eyes and move for the first time in my life.

    Just open my eyes and see my true being.

    I am alive.




    Submitted on 2008-02-21 11:47:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i was a little confused when i reached the end and it said that you were a demon. it was a little repetitive but otherwise a goodwrite.
    | Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      honetly. i dont belive you when you say your a demon. no offense but you'll know a demon when when you meet one. but maybe not yo. i mean, if you want to work for satan go ahead yo. but maybe one day youll meet a angel yo. a fight between two realms using earth as a battle field. your a pawn yo. hahaha. nice write though.





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    | Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't ask why, but I really like this. I guess it's because I can related to a lot of it. The part where you feel like this is a pivotal point in your life, that came off as very clear, raw, and brilliant... It was like a knife cutting down through the smog and you could see everything clearly, with sparkling clarity... that's how it came off to me. I like it. Nice job!!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by sailorliones | [ Reply to This ]


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