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    dots Submission Name: i am creepydots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 612
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1584



    Description:
       i get stuck in arguement with myself about my name and then i kinda of realize maybe im just talking to myself again. hi, im Creepy.


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    dotsi am creepydots
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    I am The Creepy Critter
    Or was it Creepy, the critter
    Sometimes, Creepy & Critter
    Fight each other
    For control
    They try to make themselves a whole
    A living soul
    One year Santa gave them coal
    At first they just got told
    They where to bold
    But it was cold
    And in the end they got together
    To beat the seasons snowy weather.
    To make The Creepy Critter
    I gave myself the jitters
    To become Creepy, the critter.
    But sometimes in the winter
    I get jitters
    From the cold
    Then i remember coal
    And sometimes Creepy & Critter
    Get too bitter
    For the winter
    And try to kill each other
    For the coal
    But remeber a lonely winter getting told
    That saving oneself is sold
    So maybe they should just hold hands
    Instead of making obsurd demands
    Just to save the winter from the cold
    Cuz then Santa would just get told
    That one day coal
    Could turn to goals
    Of making gold
    Thats really diamonds
    In an really shiny mold
    That grows on rotten orange peels
    Mixed with toothpaste
    To make some trippy shit come true.
    Like when they kill themself
    Before the winters over
    But how cold is the winter
    When they just hold each other
    When Creepy, the critter
    Becomes The Creepy Critter
    But am I The Creepy Critter
    Or am I Creepy, the critter?
    Perhaps just plain ol' CREEPY yo




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    ||| Comments |||
      inner conflict is my favorite.
    especially when both sides are amusing.

    :]

    <3

    take care.
    | Posted on 2008-02-28 00:00:00 | by shawnaSUNSHINE | [ Reply to This ]
      i [censored] love this.
    hah, it was just so twisted and amusing.
    <3
    | Posted on 2008-02-22 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      this was funny in most parts and lots of rhymes too i enjoyed the read

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-02-22 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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