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Gay Times


Author: Suven7
ASL Info:    20 female Fla
Elite Ratio:    7.08 - 478 /260 /47
Words: 117
Class/Type: Prose /Serious
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Can you afford to be gay? Yeah, neither can I.


Gay Times



She said she’s not gay –
Most of the time –
And I said
"…"

All I could say was
"…"

I craned my neck to look
At her, maybe to
Shame her in saying
“Just kidding!”

But the Twix in my mouth
Continued to grow heavier in
Density and some bits
Had even eloped with
The roof of my mouth.

I thought of how she can’t
Afford to be gay.

“You’re too ugly,” I was
About to say, but instead
"…"
Came out as I
Shoved another bar of
Twix in my mouth and
shifted my weight in
turning away.




Submitted on 2008-02-21 17:46:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Another one. I reallllly wanna see how low I can get your percentage before I get bored.
I also want to see if you get annoyed by it.
But considering you don't even go on this site anymore, I highly doubt it.
Then again, you are Mimi.
| Posted on 2009-10-30 00:00:00 | by GuessWho | [ Reply to This ]
  2008? You should be paying more attention to school!
You musta been very unsatisfied (you know what I mean).
Now for some nonsense!
Ooga? Ni hao! Kekekeke.
Oyang Fema!
Rendered pork belly fat!
| Posted on 2009-10-30 00:00:00 | by GuessWho | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it. Very unexpected. Very honest too. Like a conversation you'd over hear on a bus..
"But the Twix in my mouth
Continued to grow heavier in
Density and some bits
Had even eloped with
The roof of my mouth."
Maybe that was a bit too much but I don't really have any suggestions, I'll take it as it is.
| Posted on 2008-06-08 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]
  This piece was different, it left me with many questions though. Things such as was the person you were talking to your friend? Was she really ugly or was it because who she said she was change your opinion of her? Was that her trying to come out to you?

I also believe it became a tad repetative, at some point I think perhaps maybe you could have worded it somehow so that people would no you didnt say anything but you didn't paraphrase on an inconsistant basis.

Interesting piece anyway and I'd like to see more from you possibly on this subject.

-Poppi
| Posted on 2008-02-22 00:00:00 | by poppi | [ Reply to This ]
  So...
I double entendre created here is crazy. Gay as in stupid or gay as in gay...
The second line is perfectly set up. I was reading the poem...and then I was READING the poem.
Tell "her" to stop being stupid and that she's not gay.

Sometimes all we can do is shove another twix in our mouth to keep from...going crazy? getting angry? laughing?...I think that's why we do it...because we can't figure out how to respond.

Love - Olah
| Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by Olah89 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, what happened here? I must know more about this situation. Sounds... fascinating. Kinda hilarious in a way, but I'm sure that it will make more sense once you explain it to me more...

Only sometimes gay? wha....?
| Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]


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