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    dots Submission Name: Crashing downdots
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    Author: Rehian
    ASL Info:    18/Female/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 47/50/29
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Little children cry

    While there parents all die

    They fight for our rights

    and they can no longer see the light

    We know they couldn't be bolder

    Than to fight blindly as our president has been

    This meaningless war needs to end as quick as it began

    Fathers and mothers far away from their family and friends

    As we watch the explosions and the bombs, our fragile hearts bends

    Into the pieces of pain

    We all need to come together and let Bush know that it's a sin

    To send brave soldiers to their death

    What we need is a new leader which would be best

    The little children want their parents back

    But, we all know that you lack

    The power of good judgment and care

    So we'll protest and bare

    To watch our brave soldiers

    The blame is on you

    so carry their boulder

    and your shame too







    Submitted on 2008-02-21 18:20:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can relate to this too, i hacve a very good friend of mine who is in Iraq and he just happens to be engaged to my best friend, but i can really relate because other than seeing his pain for being there i can aslo see how much my friend is suffering for knowing that the man that she loves is there and not knowing is hes gonna come back alright is what kills her the most, but at the same time its killing me...the truth is when a soldier dies in this war, the soldier is not the only one dying, the families and friends of that soldier die too, although it is not a physical death it is certainly an emotional death...but anyways great write i love pieces like this because they make you think about the relaity od the world...
    | Posted on 2008-02-22 00:00:00 | by JGo | [ Reply to This ]
      i really relate to this piece just because my bf is a marine who is fighting in irag right now. i love reading pieces like this too because i myself feel that this war is useless and stupid. goodwrite
    | Posted on 2008-02-21 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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